I still believe that this essay was a difficult one but I think my topic of teacher tenure was an appropriate one for this format. I did a lot of work on the paper since the firs draft was due. After comments were posted on the first draft, I revised my draft based and then went to the writing lab last week. There i received even more instruction on my paper and things that did not flow as easily as I intended. I was told about points in my essay that we not clear and places where I needed to change the language or style. I took the block quote out of the paper and decided to paraphrase the paragraphs. It allowed me to illustrate my true feelings for the excerpt as well as explain the complicated nature of the model that the author proposed.
I think the final draft is a true representation of my work and I think that it covers the format of a Rogerian essay effectively. I clearly displayed both sides of the arguments and then established common ground with the facts that all Americans want what it best for students. I then proposed a revised tenure law that adds thoughtful and better ways to incorporate tenure in school systems. Overall, I enjoyed writing about this topic and in this writing style.
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